Tuesday, March 22, 2016

Sentinel


Ear atop chest I listen for:

a misstep in the march of blood
weakness in the wall of breath
the breach that rends
the everything of you apart from

the everything of me.

Safe, this citadel of cells,
and so I sleep.

6 comments:

  1. I'm studying how you achieved such a complete story so quickly. Very fine work! Welcome to yeah write!

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  2. This is so good! I also love the way you structured it. Happy to have you at yeah write!

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  3. Thank you both! I loved this challenge. It gave me a way to express something I've wanted to write about for a year but had no idea how to begin. Having to keep it simple was perfect. I tried to do a "Three Word Wednesday" challenge yesterday for another site and ended up with 4000 words. Good for what I think is going to become at least a novella, but a little long for a blog post. I will definitely be participating in Yeah Write again!

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  4. What a wonderful first entry here. The perfect example of a complete story in so few words. Welcome to Yeah Write! :)

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    1. Thank you! I'm looking forward to next's week's challenges already. It's great to have found a community of writers to explore. :-)

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  5. This is, indeed, one of the best entries in the challenge. Enjoyed reading this.

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